O level Speech Writing Sample - The Root Bridge

In the following article, there is a speech question that appeared in the Cambridge examination. The Root Bridge has provided you with a sample of answers to discuss the positive and negative points which students commit during speech writing. 

Before getting into it, it is essential to know the features of Speech Writing.

Features Of Speech In CIE:

• Welcome the audience 
• Introduce yourself 
• Tone a language depends on the context (audience)
• Use the 'you tone' to involve the audience 
• Use humour 
• Include pauses gestures and fillers (Umm.. etc) but sparingly 
• Refer to facts and statistics
• Use a variety of sentence structures
• Include famous quotes 
• Express Strong opinions expressed with logical reasoning
• Use figurative language such as facts, metaphors etc ...
• Ask Rhetorical Questions (usually at the beginning at the end, can be included in between as well)
• Use proper Nouns
• Use emotive language such as 'I feel delighted to' etc
• Vivid language 
• Thank audience at the end

Speech Writing O Level:

Question:

Your best friend is a popular person at school and is very successful both inside and outside the classroom. Your friend is leaving school to move overseas. Your teacher, Mr Johnson, asks you to make a speech to your classmates on the last day of term wishing your friend goodbye and good luck.

Write your speech. You must include the following:

• the name of your friend and where your friend is going
• why your friend is moving
• what you and your classmates will miss about your friend.
Cover all three points above in detail. You should make sure your speech is both polite and friendly.

Start your speech, ‘Mr Johnson and friends...’

Answer: 

Mr Johnson and friends, let me begin my speech with my sincere gratitude to all of you for your presence. However, I feel really unhappy to tell you that a very well known figure from our school is leaving us this Friday.

Adam, do you know him? Well, who does not? Mr Johnson and all my respected fellows, Adam is amidst these last days which he is spending with us. He will be leaving us this Friday for Manchester, England. Anyways I know none of us should actually be sad for Adam moving overseas. It will be just a physical day to day connection that would be missing, but we all will be virtually connected way too strong. Adam would be living in a strong long-distance friendship.

As you all know, we only have three months left before we pass out from School. Adam is indeed a very intelligent student. He had planned to join his father in Manchester and continue his further studies. I believe all of you would be praying for the best of Adam's future so do all of us.

Whether it is Adam's academic efficiency that we would miss but his excellence in co-curricular activities is also leaving us with much to debate.

I thank you all and especially Adam to give me your precious time and listen to me attentively. Umm well, that's what I have to say. Thank you all once again and I would conclude my words by saying:
"Great friends are hard to find, difficult to leave, impossible to forget."

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Comments On Sample:

Overall the speech written by the candidate is satisfactory. It has properly fulfilled the format of directed writing by included five required paragraphs: Introduction, Content point 1, Content point 2, Content point 3 and Conclusion. The sample included has also beginner the report by welcoming the audience. 

The tone is fine and the audience is engaged by 'you tone'.Sparingly fillers are used which is good. 

Similarly, the sample includes a famous saying at the end and emotive language is also used. In addition, the audience is thanked at the end to conclude the speech.

However, the writer has not introduced himself/herself. Facts and statistics are not present. 

There are simple and compound sentences but complex and compound-complex are very rarely found. Figurate language is also lacking.